Sample Chapter for Nicholas Kristo
“Every chapter rewards the reader by the interesting characters, time, locality and, finally, good reminders of lessons we sometimes forget to utilize. Your ’showing’ of selfless service to others, with a satisfaction to the server that is not found in a morass of pride and self-aggrandizement, is accomplished skillfully and unobtrusively.”
Tomand Oma
“This story becomes more and more a lesson for all who read. And it is entertaining too that is the beauty of it. I enjoyed reading this chapter very much and I am eager to read the next one.”
God bless you
Sharon
“What an amazing outreach this book is providing. It hits home with a hard impact in many places, from the discussion on false pride, to the subtle nuances of the kindness weaving through the chapters that each of the people exhibits towards each other from changed hearts. For example, in this line: You are an extraordinary man, Giovanni, and I shall record your story with a tenderness and nobility proportionate to the spirit from whence it came.”
This part is so lovely: “In time, I came to feel the same validation Jives did, and all at once my soul did rest and my life had true meaning.”
Focused True North
“The more I read of this story of yours, the more beauty I find in what you have written. This will be a book full of great and gentle teaching.
There are a few changes indicated which I trust you will make … in order
to justify my 5 star award !”
Nannete Mary
“really good dialog. most of the dialog i read is very trite , this flowed very well and when read aloud sounded real. nice work.no real complaints about this piece! keep up the good work.”
Dalrathki
The Crooked Stick Sample Chapter
“Yes, I enjoyed this chapter too. I liked the idea of Paulo taking on his brother’s identity, and being led into his mission so easily. Now I am hooked. I just have to know how he tracks down the evildoer. I will continue with the next few chapters.”
Pollyanne
“Temper, temper! However, I like Paulo. His heart is right where it ought to be. Hope he gets over that temper though, so we can have Peto back for a while. You have a strong hand on the story-telling reins, and I’m interested to find out what happens nect.”
Sallyo
“Hmmm, getting very interesting. This chapter shows great imagination as well as moral character. The story is moving along well without pause and is easily followed. It grabs the reader and makes them want to continue the read for as long as it take to reach conclusion. That’s a job well done!”
Gina
“Honesty, even in anger—-I am remembering the verse, “be angry and sin not”, which is what Paulo is trying to do—-and haven’t I myself done it, and often enough to connect my own behavior patterns with those in this story?—-again, your words of gentle power skillfully guide the heart without insulting the fragile intelligence.”
Michael F
“I really enjoy this story, and I see what his mission was- but he also was not to get angry- and he did- so now he is to stop the evilness of this priest- but he needs help from above. Very interesting story.”
Permelia
Chasing Elmer Gantry Sample Chapter
“I accepted your suggestion to read this chapter and find it all the more intriguing, sensing your grasp on realms others consider fantasy alone. Your knowledge seems much more in-depth than mine and this gives your story solid impact that most readers will interpret as well organized thoughts put into story form for entertainment purposes. If only they had an inkling of this truth of which you are speaking–but then again, your writing of this story may provide that very thing–an inkling opening up a closed door where pre-seeded thoughts may grow and bloom. Truly an exquisite writing presentation.”
Quite Spirited
“This is getting more and more interesting. As a Christian myself it is very nice to see fiction that mentions Christianity and especially the Holy Spirit. I am starting to wonder if this power is from God or is Satan trying to masquerade…..”
Starla
“I have often felt the same way in the hospital. It is amazing that you can find any way of amusing yourself lieing in htat bed. You captured that feeling exacally and I wonted nothing but to keep reading. It was great.”
happiotter
A Message in the Stars
Deanna More wrote,
..
“Is there no limit to your imagination, Rick?
You write like a Man with no artistic boundaries that would
inhibit your imaginative flow.
Highly captivating story - from beginning to end.
The Drama visibly unfolds and the heightened emotional impact takes hold,
due to the wonderful imagery. Rick, you’ve penned expert descriptions that
are remarkable in both their detail and execution.
I especially like the ending because it aptly portrays the
Humanistic yen to awaken the Warrior - to settle the score.”
Deanna xx
“Hi Rick,
Very strong ending! The revolving door is powered with every ready batteries, atoned it? How awful but true. The human race is much too complicated and this love of war is much too compelling, you bring this point home so well.
Good story”
Gina
“P.S. I have checked out you art work on dome of your other post…thumbs up baby!”
Poezija wrote,
“This is an extremely gripping story which could probably be a full length novel. I don’t usually read anything like this—I don’t like to think too much about serious stuff like this, but I started reading and got sucked in. It is very well written and well done for a story that makes the reader think and possibly feel quite scared or just thinking deeply–good work does that. Bravo and God bless!!”
Ritsal wrote,
“You have a great working imagination, and this story combines a great premise with the sad realization that no matter what miracles are witnessed, there will be those that refuse to see. Great job.”
Best wishes,
Rita
Ainsley_Jo_Phillips wrote,
“This works well–either as a single chapter in a larger work or else as a piece of flash fiction. There’s a lesson in her how just a single spark of hate can be allowed to grow into something that will destroy love–yet, only partially, because love will always be the winner!”
A New Jersey Yankee in King Solomon’s Court
pughwee wrote,
“It is no wonder you recommended this particular story, and after reading it, I am filled with wonder that you took the time to peruse my amateurish, in comparison, fiction attempt. I feel honored indeed. Your claim that you write about TRUTH is backed-up tenfold by the lessons one can take away reading here about a modern-day girl’s struggle with her life-determining descision, and the jolt into the past that aided her reasoning.
If it were possible, I would consider moving to Manhattan just to attend your church. If your sermons are as wise as your writing, I would greatly benefit.
One slight thing I noticed (the editor in me just cannot be squelched, even in the presence of brilliance)–”A tall man stood, out(,) wearing a purple robe and thin golden crown upon his head, directly in front of the huge, ornate chair.”–misplaced comma.
Thanks for recommending the story, and it won’t be the last of your work I take in…Pughwee”
Shell wrote,
“What a different swing you put on so many different levels.
Very creative and sends a powerful message on our cultures views and how tainted they are because of the way we now live.
Very inspiring!”
linternet wrote,
“This is a fantastic piece of writing.
It’s very well written, your take on this issue is creative, and your argument is very powerful.
That said, as a non-Christian who firmly supports a woman’s right to have an abortion, I was looking for an argument, and I got one:
The examples you use in your story illustrates how we use terminology to lessen the emotional impact of what an abortion is. Your story also shows how there would be far less abortions if the mother had to physically strangle her child in front of people six months after he or she was born.
Your examples are correct. They make for a convincing argument. Like most “hot-button issues”, however, your examples fail to tell the whole story. (and I’m sure I will be guilty of this myself right here).
Your examples imply (and please correct me if I’m wrong) that there is no difference between an abortion and the murder of a six-month old child. The difference, however, is that a six-month old baby does not need to use its mother’s body as a life support system (though he or she certainly needs to be taken care of by someone).
My question to you is what is it that obligates one human being to act as a life support system for another? Am I a murderer for having two kidneys because someone, somewhere in the world, will die who could have been saved had I donated one of my kidneys to them?
You could argue that the act of consentual sex is what obligates a mother to the unborn child but in the example you give, specifically rape, the mother did NOT give consent. The question remains.”
Beatlegirl61 wrote,
“Phew !! A really powerful story for ‘fiction’ and I had to pinch myself a few times.. Really gripping and wonderfully writen story.. Well narrated and beautifully descripted.. All the best to you, carol :))”
N. WILDE wrote,
“Very profesional, intelligent and moving writing . You have a great ability at describing emotion as well as the surroundings.
The opinion expressed in your piece is your own and though I may not agree with it I do think that you deserve praise for the presentation of your argument.
There is only one point that did jar and that was at the beginning with the conversation about the father of the child. The women come across as “brainless” as they say that he could have anyone. So what? It’s a very small point in your story and does detract from the overall intelligent story you have written.”
“Absolutely brilliant! Very thought provoking!”
Glen Austin Tx
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